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Asimov's Dirty Dozen Elements Of a Standard News Story
By Nanette Asimov,
San Francisco Chronicle
The following are general
guidelines for writing a basic news article. Each number
represents a new paragraph. Their order is somewhat
flexible. Some of the elements may be augmented. Some
may be dropped, though never the lede* or nut graf.
These are not firm rules, but the ingredients of a
successful story.
* Note some strange spellings,
such as "lede" (the first sentence) and "graf"
(paragraph). Certain code words date back to the days of
hot lead type, when intentional misspellings were used
to communicate with printers in the backshop. This way,
printers could recognize instructions meant for them,
and would know not to let them be printed in the
newspaper.
- First sentence ("lede")
Make the first sentence the NEWS. No
dilly-dallying. News is the newest thing. Was there
a vote? Did someone die? Was someone appointed? Was
there a protest? Is big money being offered? Wasted?
Time for background later. Lede should be SHORT, yet
must tell who, what, when and where. Don't overload
it with details.
EXAMPLE: The San Francisco
school board voted unanimously last night to
raise the hurdle for high school graduation by
adding more mandatory math and science classes.
IMPORTANT: Recognize news;
don't bury it. Sometimes the news is more than
one thing. If the teachers union had threatened
to sue the board, then your lede must include
that key fact in a single, tight sentence:
Despite the threat of a lawsuit by teachers, the
San Francisco school board voted unanimously
last night to require more math and science
classes in high school.
- Second sentence
gives more details about the first. Save details for
the second graf. Avoid packing them into the lede:
EXAMPLE: The board voted 7
to 0 on the proposal by Superintendent Jill
Rojas to require high school students to take a
third year of math and science; a second year of
foreign language and the arts; more health
classes and fewer electives, such as wood shop.
- Sexy quote.
Select the quote that best illustrates the
points made in the lede and second sentence. When
out gathering news, a reporter should remember to
listen for that "sexy quote," or ask the question
that is likely to produce it.
EXAMPLE: "It's shameful to
think that in the 21st century, a student can
graduate from a California high school after
completing only two years of math and two years
of science," Rojas told the board. "Four-year
colleges do not seek to admit students with such
minimal requirements. Doors are closed to some
students before they are 18 years old."
- The "nut graf."
In this essential
paragraph -- or paragraphs -- the writer steps back
from the immediate events to provide context. This
graf tells how the current news fits into the larger
picture. It tells what's been happening lately or
elsewhere, so the reader knows why story matters.
EXAMPLE: The school
board's action mirrors efforts around the
country to raise academic standards. Embarrassed
by American students' poor performance on
international achievement tests in recent years,
and pressured by colleges to produce
better-prepared graduates, public educators
nationwide are turning back to basics. And that
means students everywhere are facing more
lessons in reading, writing and arithmetic --
and less art, music and perennial favorites like
wood shop.
- Summary of what's to come.
Here the writer lays
out the varying points of view, foreshadowing the
details of the rest of the story. This summary is
key to fairness: No one's point of view is paramount
if all are summarized toward the beginning of the
story.
EXAMPLE: At the school
board meeting in San Francisco, several teachers
said the plan was long overdue. But others were
furious. Many who teach the highest levels of
math and science predicted that the quality of
their rigorous courses will inevitably be
watered down if students of all levels are
forced to take them. A number of teachers also
warned that dropout rates would rise if art and
shop classes are neglected.
- Supporting quotes, in
backwards order.
This quote should support the last point of view
summarized in the previous graf.
EXAMPLE: "I'm very
worried," said Sylvester Smith, a 10th-grade
English teacher. "You board members don't
realize that wood shop keeps kids coming to
school."
- Transition, then another
supporting quote.
Quotes from two people
should never be back to back. A transition is needed
as a bridge from one idea to another. Then follow up
with the relevant quote. Quotes are usually in a
separate paragraph to set them off.
EXAMPLE: For months,
several of the district's top teachers have
spoken out against the superintendent's plan to
raise graduation requirements. At school board
meetings, those teachers have said the plan
looks better on paper than in reality because
many students are ill- prepared to do well in
higher-level math and science classes.
"This won't help poor
students do better," said Jon James, a chemistry
teacher. "It will hurt the students who do
well."
- Transition, then final
supporting quote.
Notice that the
supporting quotes go in reverse order from the way
they were summarized in #5, the summary graf.
EXAMPLE: Not all teachers
opposed the plan, and some were downright
enthusiastic.
"I teach in middle
school," said Mary Mustard, "and I think the new
requirements will give students a reason to
study harder in the earlier grades."
- Real-time color,
anecdotes, examples.
This need not be
confined to this section. "Color" means brief
descriptions of sights, sounds and mood.
EXAMPLE: School board
members debated the graduation plan for almost
90 minutes. Restless students, teachers and
parents waited for the vote, the sound of their
private conversations rising with their
impatience. As the din from their chatter grew
louder, board members called for quiet and even
ejected some offenders from the auditorium.
- The past
Is there additional
history that can help the reader understand more
about the subject? Has this sort of thing happened
before? How is this time different or similar?
EXAMPLE: It has been 20
years since San Francisco's high school
graduation standards were raised and 10 years
since they were lowered again.
- The future
Wind up the story by
looking toward the future. What is the next step? Or
if an anecdote is used up toward the top, a useful
technique is to refer back to the beginning, or to
the anecdote, to look to the future.
EXAMPLE: After the vote, a
delighted Superintendent Rojas said she plans to
propose new academic requirements in the lower
grades, too.
- The kicker
Usually a short,
high-impact sentence. It may be a poignant or
telling quote. In some stories, the kicker can be
something that brings the reader back to an idea or
anecdote told at the beginning. Or it may be a
surprising bit of information that works best at the
end.
EXAMPLE: Turning to a
group of supportive teachers who lingered to
chat, Rojas suggested that calculus be taught as
early as the fourth grade. The happy teachers
frowned collectively. "Well," said Rojas. "It's
just an idea."
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